Arrangement (Chapter 3) By Kelsey

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        The reason I have a picture of flowers is, arranging flowers is the first thing that came to my mind when I read the title of this chapter, arrangement.  When starting to make a boque or put flowers into a bowl there are a lot of flowers and you start putting them together piece by piece, changing where they are placed throughout the process, to make a very beautiful work of art.  I think this is how writing is at some point, especially in my own experience writing.  Sometimes I just have to start writing in order to figure out the best way to arrange my writing.  I have found this to be true so many times as I write papers for school.  I often make an outline to start out, but by the time that I have decided that my paper is complete it is in a completely different arrangement for what makes the writing sound better and flow more freely.  

      Throughout reading this chapter I kept thinking about how a person would tell a story, or explain something if they were talking with you face to face.  They would have an introduction to make you familiar with the story, then they would start adding their support points or telling the story, then they would wrap it up and try to get you to remember or continue thinking about this certain subject.  I learned that if everything does not have an order and is just thrown together then nobody will want to read what you are writing because it is so badly organized.  Organization, or arrangement, when writing is very important not only for your reader, but it is also important for you to sound intelligent.  One thing that I knew, but popped out to me was the short section on making an outline.  Sometimes when I write I just start writing without planning before.  I think that planning before is very beneficial in the long run.   

      According to my knowledge the important points in this chapter are one to start with an introduction always.  Second, following the introduction support points are needed in order to support the thesis you made in the introduction.  Also always make sure your support points support your thesis.  Third, your writing should always end with a conclusion.  This piece is that last part of your writing before the reader finishes and decides what to think about your writing.  

Written by: Kelsey Robison

Mini Paper Thesis - Kelsey Robison

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Topic - Communication through texting

More specifics -

• Meaner people
• Body language is missing
• May misjudgements of peoples meanings
• Texting etiquette
• Using emojis
• People are bad at talking to each other

Arguable sentences -

• Texting has taught our society poor communication skills when they talk face to face.
• When texting there are many unseen hints that are missed from when you talk to a person face to face.
• Communication through texting is creating meaner, faker, and people with poor communication skills.
• Texting etiquette seems to be nonexistent as people just say what they want, when they want, and how they want because it is easier to type than to say.
• Emojis often help a person to understand the true feelings of the person on the other line.
• People are able to be meaner when the person they are talking to is not standing right in front of them.  

My favorite -   Communication through texting is creating meaner, faker, and people with poor communication skills.
 
Written by- Kelsey Robison

Hayley's Mini-Essay Outline: Technology in Education

Topic: Technology in Education

The Specifics:

• Having better access to information through the internet
• Being able to revise and rewrite documents on the computer
• Having a better understanding of assignments through email and text messages

Arguable Sentences:

• Education is enhanced with the aid of computers
• Students can better access information through the internet
• Students can get better grades when they are able to ask their teachers about assignments through email and text messages

My favorite one: Education is enhanced with the aid of computers.

Video games and violence By: Isabella Montalbetti

Video games and violence

Specific examples:

- kids are too young for certain games
-inhumane
-Brain washing

Forming arguable sentences:

- Many parents don't realize what goes on in the video game they are buying their children.
- Most video games involve stealing, killing people/ animals, and destroying property.
-I believe that video games are why we have so much bullying.

Thesis statement:

The reason why I think that video games are violent is because they are too young for certain ages, they are inhumane, and they brain wash children without them even realizing it.

Blog Reviews #1

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Kelsey followed: Whatever Frail My Heart Apart by John Scalzi
Rating: 8/10 Great pictures and science fiction writing. The writing is interesting. Some posts seemed too long.

Hayley followed: Mental Floss
Rating: 6/10 There are a lot of great pictures. The writing is interesting. There is a variety of topics that they write about. But they are lacking detail in their writing.

Sofia followed: Underground New York Public Library
Rating: 6/10 It was visually appealing with a catchy title. Not enough blog description.

We (Creative Minds) decided that our favorite blog is "Whatever". We generally like this blog because we thought that it was visually appealing, well written, and there's a wide variety of topics. This pictures posted on this blog made the posts more interesting and realistic. As we followed this blog, we noticed the cover photo changed every so often, bringing a new thought to our minds.

John Scalzi is a science fiction writer. We believe because of this that his posts were really easy to follow and kept us entertained. He didn't make many mistakes with his grammar, so it was easier to read. Although he had great writing, we found that some posts were too long and often lost our attention by the end.

Recently, there was a Hugo award and he wrote about that and books for a few days. His latest post was about a post he wrote ten years ago titled, "Being Poor". He also posts about his cat often, which makes the blog more entertaining and shows his personality. Overall, we enjoyed following the blog, "Whatever" because of its appealing nature.

Arranging an Essay By: Isabella Montalbetti

After reading the assigned chapter, I learned about multiple different ways on how to arrange an essay. With what I read I could relate to what I had learned in previous English classes. An example of what I experienced in these classes was on research papers and a script for a play. A big thing I learned is understanding the parts of an essay. Another new fact I discovered with this chapter was about plagiarism and exactly what it meant. I can definitely see now how important it is arranging an essay.

The main points in this chapter were the introduction, the body paragraphs, and the conclusion. For the introduction it said that it must introduce the subject, create interest and bring in the audience, finally state your thesis. The body paragraphs must have strong topic sentences. They also need to be unified, coherent, and have some key words. During the conclusion you must restate your thesis, back up your main ideas, and review the key points.

In all I can be comfortable knowing all I know about forming and arranging an essay. I can recognize a pattern, form a thesis, and finish strong with a conclusion. 

By: Isabella Montalbetti

Reverse Outline: Email Etiquette

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1. Introduction: Describes himself and how he communicates through emails, compared how more powerful people communicate through emails.

2. Thesis: "See, the e-blurt, like so many modes of personal expression, is all about power."

3. Support: Powerful people spell poorly on purpose showing that they are busier, hence they are more powerful.
 
    Support: High power doesn't necessarily mean good or high level grammar. "Hip power" meaning not as formal.

    Support: "What are you trying to say?" Making the people under you try to guess what you're trying to say. They think that they are to important to correct themselves.

4. Counter argument: He talked to his lawyer friend and she said that "If your poorly written email messages are retained as one of the companies electronic business records, and the company is hit with a lawsuit, and your email is subpoenaed, the fact that your messages were written in an unprofessional, illogical way could come back to haunt not only you but the company as well."

5. Conclusion (not very long): Basically just restates the thesis.

6. Thesis #2: "Which only confirms what I always felt about power; That the people that really understand it don't say anything at all."