Outline For Kelsey's Thesis

Kelsey's Thesis: "My belief in God helps me to understand who I am and has taught me the importance of values that better myself and the world around me"

Example 1: Going to church helps me learn more about God. When I'm at church, I read the Bible and worship, which helps me develop and learn how to be a better person.

Example 2: Spending time alone praying helps me relax and feel peace, which makes me feel at ease and helps lower my stress, helping me to act kinder to others.

Example 3: Learning about God's values has guided me through tough times and helped me get along better with others.

Conclusion: Myself and the world around me are made better because of my belief in God.

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Outline for Hayley's Thesis

Thesis: Social swing dancing benefits my life in a variety of ways.

Example #1- While on the dance floor, Hayley and her partner, thats when Hayley's the happiest.

Example #2- The contests that Hayley enters can earn her money if she wins for school or her future.

Example #3- Ever since Hayley was little, she has felt very passionate for swing dancing.

Example #4- Swing dancing is a great way to get out and meet different people.

Conclusion: Socially swing dancing has made Hayley life long memories. She enjoys everything about it and getting to do what makes her happy. She has gained many friends that have the same passion as she does. Sometimes even wins prizes or money for doing what she loves.


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Written by: Isabella Sofia Montalbetti

Partnered Outline

Hayley's  Exemplification Essay through my eyes:

Intro/Thesis - Social swing dancing benefits my life in a variety of ways.

Example 1 - Get to know other people through dancing with them.  Like in Footloose, they all became like a family through their love for dancing.

Example 2 - Listen to many different kind of music through going swing dancing at different places.

Example 3 - Learn how to move with the music so you don't feel awkward when you go out to dances, everybody follows you because you look like you know what you are doing.

Example 4 - Learning this kind of dance helps to understand history because it was widely popular in our history.

Example 5 - Knowing how to dance also gives a boost of confidence to know that you are really good at something else. 

Example 6 - Swing dancing gives you one more thing to be excited about. 

Conclusion - There are many lessons that you have to learn in life, and swing dancing has taught me many of those lessons.



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Written by - Kelsey Robison

Logical Fallacy #1

Jumping to Conclusion.

Defined: "Hasty, or sweeping generalization", the writer makes a conclusion when they do not have enough information or evidence. Jumping to conclusions causes people to judge or decide without having the facts or based on their own biases, thinking everyone would agree with them.  

Tip:  Don't think that people agree with all your opinions, and make sure to have a complete amount of information before you make a point. 

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Exemplification Response

Exemplification response

After reading chapter 8, “Exemplification”, I understand exactly how and the rules on writing an exemplification essay. Reading about it I noticed that the structure of this essay was a lot alike a basic MLA formatted essay. The similarities are that you start off with an introduction. Within the introduction you have your thesis. Then you have your body paragraphs. Finally, you have a conclusion. Although, the difference in an exemplification essay is that you need a good amount of examples supporting your broad topics. Your examples need to be persuasive, have some interest and clarify exactly what you are trying to say.

In an exemplification essay you need to be specific with your examples. You also can arrange your examples in different ways. One way you can arrange them is by chronological order. These examples will consist of which examples occurred first to those that occurred last. Another way is in order of increasing complexity. This means the examples would begin simpler leading to the more complex ones. Lastly, you can arrange them in order of importance. Starting with the less significant ones moving towards the ones that are most significant or persuasive.

Overall, I can say that I feel very comfortable writing an exemplification essay after reading this chapter. I learned how to use different transitions, how to structure the essay, and how to choose from a broad example to a specific one.

Written by: Isabella Sofia Montalbetti

Exemplificaiton Thesis

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Topic:  Values and how they better the world. 

Thesis Options:
1. My religion has helped me create and use good values in my life.
2. It's not all about you stupid.
3. Making yourself have better values makes the world a better place.
4. My family has taught me to think of others before myself.
5. My belief in God helps me to understand who I am and has taught me the importance of values that better myself and the world around me.

My Favorite:
        My belief in God helps me to understand who I am and has taught me the importance of values that better myself and the world around me.

Exemplification Essay Thesis

Thesis: Social swing dancing benefits my life in a variety of ways.